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Before me is this screen,
bright and unreal.
The plastic keys beneath my fingertips
Are not quite right for this sort of work.
I'd rather be scribbling on a scrap of paper,
a three-year-old mechanical pencil pressed to the notebook
and longing to take on a life of its own.
It's so much more personal --
The not-quite-right-angle of my L,
the imperfect circle of my o,
the sharp point of my v,
and the feminine loop of my e.
What passion is there in Times New Roman text?
So cold, precise and stark black
against this terrible and unforgiving white.
The clicking of keystrokes
breaks the calm silence of the room and drives me mad,
like the steadily growing volume
of a heartbeat beneath the floorboards.
Artificial light pours out,
giving my hands and face
A surreal blue tint that screams,
"Who are you to question the marvel
That is the computer?!"
©2007-2009 =saffyre-onyx
:iconsaffyre-onyx:

Author's Comments

I'm not entirely sure where this one came from, other than something that came up in a conversation I had with someone lastnight. We were talking about how neither of us is as comfortable writing on a computer as we are handwriting our work.

So I sat down tonight, bored and feeling the need to do something creative. I started writing, but everything seemed so... lacking. I don't know what it lacked, but it lacked something fundamental to poetry. After making multiple attempts at stringing together lines to make a stanza or two, I finally gave up and decided to write about... well, not being able to write using a computer. :P

Enjoy!

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:iconstormyblueyz:
:dance: I think this is awesome. Your words fit together so nicely - it's true of all your pieces. My opinion, lacking technical criticality, matters not to most... :giggle: All that said, I guess I mostly mean that I like everything you write. I fail to comment very often, though. Wonder why I'm so lazy sometimes...

:hug:

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:peace: & :love:
:iconsaffyre-onyx:
We can all be a bit lazy with other people's deviations. I often forget to comment on your works as well.

I'm sooooo glad you like this piece. :D
:iconx-outsider-x:
I like this...and not only because it was based on our conversation!

I like your critique of your own handwriting as well...and the way that it's not immediately apparent what word you're spelling...

Good stuff! :D

--
That thou mayest be everything
seek to be nothing.

~St. John of the Cross
:iconsaffyre-onyx:
:D Thanks. This is one of the few poems I really feel good about. :dance:
:iconzilla939:
i can't tell you how much this hits home with me.

--
[ zilla ]

baby, you're a rich man too.
:iconsaffyre-onyx:
:) I'm glad you can relate. Thank you for the comment and the watch.
:iconnarcissuskitten:
I can sometimes write decent prose on the computer, but NEVER poetry. That's what my notebook and my wonderful black Precise V5 pen are for.

Great work. :)

--
Why is it that I find it so difficult to accept the present moment, whole as an apple, without cutting and hacking at it to find a purpose, or setting it up on a shelf with other apples to measure its worth...? ~Sylvia Plath
:iconsaffyre-onyx:
I can generally write prose on the computer. Not a big issue. Actually some of my best prose has been done on the computer.

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